[a foot race is setup in a stadium, in which a confused green character has to start 100m away from the finish line, while a smug orange character starts 10m away from the finish line]
[orange easily finishes first, and smugly proclaims] Another easy win! I am better than everyone!
[green, on all fours, visibly tired and sweating] Well that was unfair…
[orange, covered in medals and holding a trophy, points at green angrily and scolds them] Get a grip What a sore loser You just hate success!
[yellow watches the race on TV, and rants about it from their sofa] If green wanted to win, he should have worked harder Some people are just allergic to effort Entitled… (?) (?)… millenials Always looking for excuses People need to be taught discipline Immigr… (?) Typical green behavior Should seize opportunities Bootstraps Quitter behavior Green people want to be poor
The visual flow for dialog is bad. Especially on panel 3. The way the eyes move from panel 2 to 3 has you read the dialog from orange on panel 2 directly to the orange dialog on panel 3. Especially since orange’s dialog is higher in the panel.
Convention is to read the highest text first. So it reads as though orange is just unprompted berating green, to which then green is responding to that (that the berating is unfair, not that the race was unfair). When you realize that’s the wrong order, and you’re supposed to read the lower text first, then it makes sense that green is stating the fault initially and then orange is attacking green for that.
While you’ve got a point and it’s constructive feedback, you gotta give them credit for not using AI.
I feel like people with drawings skills that most consider poor, are the one’s more likely to use AI, the artist made the effort and had the courage to post it despite it being “imperfect”
I’m not even sure why the criticism is so highly upvoted; it’s literally a crude stickman comic. It feels on par with pointing out the distances between 100m and 50m appear shorter than 50m and 10m. The intent was purely the message, and that gets across perfectly fine.